The Remarkable Yellow Man – 100WC Week 23

Once upon a time there was a boy called Marco Polo who loved to explore. He loved to explore so much he explored the dairy section at Coles. One day he was wandering through the dairy section at Coles when he discovered a tiny mysterious, and remarkable yellow man, walking gingerly amongst the cheese.  

 

The tiny yellow man gave the Marco Polo one wish for setting him free from the cheese section. Marco’s wish was for the yellow mysterious man to disappear. He vanished. However that night when Marco Polo went to bed he saw the yellow man stuck on top of his bedroom’s roof!

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  1. Hi Joseph,

    Well done for incuding all the words in the prompt! Be careful you don’t repeat yourself too much: who loved to explore. He loved to explore so much (no need to say these words twice). You used some great adjectives but remember if you list a few in one sentence, they must be separated with commas and use ‘and’ before the last one, e.g tiny, mysterious and remarkable yellow man. Vanished was a great choice of verb, well done! Your last sentence says “stuck on top of his bedroom’s roof!” It’s better to say “stuck to the ceiling of his bedroom”. The roof is on the outside of the house. Keep up the good work!

    From Ms Fitzgerald

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