…The noise was so loud…100WC Week 21

I was creeping through a haunted house, trying to avoid the webs. I went past a room with a doll head on the ground, i slowly tiptoed in…suddenly all the lights went out! I could a soft whisper calling my name “Liam come…come with me.” I saw a dark ghost appearing and disappearing through the darkness, i followed him while i was getting ready to strike. He brought me to a room with a door, “what use was this old rusty door for?” i wondered. I curiously walked through the door. Their was a big screen, on the screen was a……

 

By Liam

One thought on “…The noise was so loud…100WC Week 21

  1. Hi Liam,

    This is a great story, full of excellent descriptions and a cliff hanger at the end. I loved the strong vocabulary you have used like “slowly tiptoed”, “haunted house”, “strike”, “old rusty door”, “curiously walked”. Something you could work on for next week is your use of capital ‘I’. Remember to re-read your work to ensure every sentence makes sense.

    From Ms Fitzgerald

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