Whale – 100WC Week 19

One day there was a family who were sailing on their boat. And something was under their boat first they thought it was a wave and it happened again they realised it was a whale, and the whale threw the family into the air. I closed my eyes and when I woke up I was in a mysterious forest and there was other boats I woke up my mum and dad…

 

By Louise

 

2 thoughts on “Whale – 100WC Week 19

  1. Hi Louise, your piece was good!
    A couple things that you could work on is having 100 words in your piece. Also, don’t end the story with … because it makes they story better if you have an ending or if you are going to make a sequel then that is fine. In the beginning you made it sound like you were telling the story but, in the end you were in the story.
    I liked your story because it is different from mine. If you were to add more words what would you say? Would it be a dream, were they trapped or did the parents purposely stranded them?
    https://kidblog.org/class/mrs-rays-1617-rockstars/posts/7ver09b58vb8i3gsn3g4ks0wa

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